Here's your review. Enjoy.
I like the layout. It's subtle, yet not so plain and boring that I'll fall asleep reading your diary. The text is nice too. I can read it! The link color is readable too. This is starting off nicely.
Everything in the layout, from the pic to the links, is neat and organized. There aren't any bold letters saying 'Links' or 'Past five' or what-have-you, but you can tell where everything is. I see you gave credit to yourself for the layout. That's always a good thing.
Ok... Onto content.
I'm new to this, so I'll just write what I think of your writing style, etc., as I read from oldest to newest. I got a little off track getting to the oldest archive, January 2002. Once when I clicked 'entries' instead of 'then' and once again when I thought since August was at the bottom you'd had this diary for a year. Yeah... Blame rookie mistakes, but still look into it just for the hades of it.
Whoa. Grammar error central in this entry. There isn't a single capital I and not one period. Well, except for the '...' at the end of the paragraphs, but each paragraph is just one huge sentence seperated by comas. You also use a lot of slang like 'tha' and 'cuzins'. Using 'n' instead of 'and', not using 'ing' on anything besides Viking (which is suppose to be capitalized, I believe.), and no apostrophes are a few other things. Oh, correction on my statement about no periods. There's a period after 'lol.', 'peace.', and at the end of the quote.
Strange. The next entry is from the same day, but there are periods. One I, and it's not capitalized. There are a few more grammar mistakes, but not as many. Your lyrics are really good. You make a very good point about the nature of humans.
Oh, by the by, that song that gave you the chills is called Time After Time. A lot of people have sung it, but the words are most always the same.
I often find that if you just sit up bolt right in bed, it makes it so you feel like your awake for long enough that you can get ready. That's in response to this entry, but I also wake up at 4:15 to 5:00a.m. on weekdays for school. More slang and grammar mistakes, though a few I's are capitalized. I'll read a few more before I skip ahead to see if they ever end...
There are two entries from the first of Febuary before the one entitled 'Welcome (re-entery)'. I don't know why, but maybe it's an archive problem. Also, it's spelled 'entry'.
Six entries in (Four if you take out the two from Febuary) and still grammar mistakes. The I's are getting captialized every now and then, but if this continues on into Febuary... Ok, I'll just keep going with my thoughts on content and when the grammar errors stop, and the poor I's all become capitalized, I'll jump for joy and shriek. If there's an end to them, make sure you have your ear plugs by your side.
'Updated to fix all the 'net slang' that I used to use. Heh.'
That's a good sign!
Hmm. Never heard of the 'age system'. I'm an only child, so that might explain it, but I don't like the sound of it much. You talk about your everyday things with a little feeling mixed in. Well, sometimes when you're angry at something you put a lot of cussing and emotion in. You're very fond of the F word when you're mad.
Updating is no problem. You've got at least two entries a day so far. I'm not very far yet, I admit, but it's looking good. Even if updating is good, content isn't so hot, and all your entries are usually small. The one flaw I've noticed in your awesome layout is that with the text table so small it makes your entries look longer than they are. If I read any really long entries I might sprain something scrolling down so far.
You write lovely poetry. This one was the second one I read of your work, I think. It was very well written. I aplaude you on that.
I'm going to skip ahead a bit in your diary so this review isn't too long.
Ok. More feelings are coming into your entries. That's a good sign. Fewer grammar mistakes, or maybe I'm just getting used to them. There are still some really long sentences seperated by comas. Definition of a good paragraph: 5 complete sentences.
I like how you question yourself about things. It may be a pain sometimes when you have no clue what to do, or who you are, but it's nice to know you're not a self-centered person who thinks they know everything about themselves and also know what's best for others.
So far, I've seen that you're trying to figure things out by writing in the diary. That's good. What's the point in remembering an event by diary-date if you have no idea what was going through your mind then?
'Oh Goodie, I have a date with a stalker.'
The content gets better and better. I aplaude you on your changing mind and writing style. *does coffehouse clap* That line that's above just cracked me up! Ok, I seriously think this review is becoming too long. I'll skip to the front and coment more on your changing writing style...
Wow. Complete sentences in paragraphs. *jumps around and shrieks* Told you I'd do it.
The writing style improves very much. I'm more addicted to the newer entries than the older ones. All in all I think your diary is just what it should be. You write what you need to, no extra, un-needed stuff, and it's all what you want to write, not what you think others want you to write. I may have hounded you for grammar mistakes, but you do seem to write from the heart. Your love of music makes you all the more interesting.
-Alanna.